题目

Children are experiencing the increasing educational, social, and commercial pressures. What are the causes? What measures do you think can be taken to reduce them?

题目分析

作为一个典型的problems and solution格式，本题目与常规的议论文还是有点不一样的。找出问题，找出原因，提出解决方式就行了，不用考虑其他的观点。打个比方，本题中既然已经说了这个题目里已经把孩子的社会压力作为一个大前提，就不用去考虑孩子是不是真的有这些压力。

思路分析

本题中的问题就是小孩压力过大。学长看来，小孩生活的重心是学习，因此可以围绕学习这方面来写。那可以讨论的东西就多了，作业，辅导班，父母的过度期望，网上的毒鸡汤，老师与老师和学校与学校之间的竞争等等，都是给小孩子压力的来源。本文中学长以恶性竞争的角度来切入主题。

范文

The nature of children is brutally suppressed in our current society. In china, young children are experiencing different forms of pressure at an increasing rate due to all sorts ofvicious competitions. Currently, this trend has no end in sight.

Most kids begin to compete with others at a very young age. For example, many parents put their children into “out-of-class” programs which usually involvePing-Pongclasses, piano lessons or other related activities. Not only these young children are deprived of their free time, butmany of those classes are designed to rush students to higher levels instead of using materials that suit their age. These “out-of-class” programscan satisfy parents but at the cost of increasing pressure to the kids as well as economically burdening their families.

In addition, the current schooling system in China also reinforces the pressure on young children. Teachers in different homerooms compete for average marks, and schools in different regions compete for producing “ace students” who are capable of taking tests. Such related ranking systems start as early as primary schools. This

The only solution is to eliminate these vicious competitions for good. For parents, they must stop forcing kids into “out-of-class” programs. And for schools, they must stop bombarding students with homework. In order to achieve this, the government should cooperate with child-protection agencies to spread awareness and educate these parents while enacting laws to prohibit schools from giving excessive amount of homework.In this way, children’s pressure can be controlled within a reasonable limit.

All in all, it is important to minimize the amount of pressure that a children experiences in his or her childhood in order not to harm their future development. Both parents and schools are responsible in providing kids a healthy lifestyle. After all, they are the future backbone of the society.

范文解析

虽然要尽量避免过于偏激，不过学长一想到自己的童年就无法冷静下来。第一段主要用于引出问题，那就是小孩子由于各种恶性竞争导致压力越来越大。第二三段用于讲解压力的起因。学长在文章中主要列举了家长和学校两方面。家长会给孩子报各种各样的补习班并给予过高的期望，而学校会给孩子过量的作业。第四段里面，我提出了缓解学生压力的办法，是让政府与各个儿童保护机构联合向家长做宣传，并且大力推行“减负”政策。最后，学长也重述了一下观点并指明了控制儿童压力的重要性。

重点词句

• brutal (adj.) 残忍地
• vicious competition (n.) 恶性竞争
• deprived of被…剥夺了…
• reinforce (v.) 增强，加深。文中指加大对学生的压力，与increase同义。
• inevitable (adj.)不可避免地
• for good永远地，与forever同义。注意该短语并非“为了…好”，那是for the good of sb./sth.
• Bombard (v.) 轰炸，文中指学校轰炸般地给学生作业，并非拿作业轰炸学生。
• Prohibit (v.) 禁止

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