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嗯，做了个决定：以后每次考试后，不光为大家做审题和答题观点的解析，顺便把我写的参考范文一并放送。于是先补一篇1月4日的大作文范文，这次考试的题目解析请戳： 。全篇范文如下：
In some countries, some criminal trails are shown on TV and the general public can watch them. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
It has been observed in some nations that criminal trails are broadcasted on television in order to inform the public. In my opinion, the possible benefits of this practice are more significant than the negative impacts.
On the one hand, I admit that televised exposure for criminal trials may have adverse effects on young generation. This is because these adolescents will be inevitably exposed to the details of criminal offenses, such as violent attack, robbery and fraud. For those who are unable to distinguish right from wrong, they are even more likely to imitate the illegal and immoral behavior. Away from contributing to juvenile delinquency, broadcasting the trials perhaps causes pressure on judicial officials, whose work may be affected more or less by the public opinions.
On the other hand, the live broadcast plays a more significant role in reducing crime rate. To be explicit, when watching how delinquents are trialed and sentenced, TV viewers will learn a great deal about the law and how the legal system works. Equipped with legal consciousness, they are able to identify what action is illegal. Broadcasted trials also function as a deterrent to the public, especially the potential criminals, since they are afraid of their faces shown on TV after committing crimes, which is seen as a disgrace to their family. Ultimately, aware that they are viewed by the public, lawyers and judges will try their best to make sure that the law is strictly followed and the justice is done to the highest standard.
To conclude, informing the public of criminal sentences on TV is an effective solution to reducing crime, in spite of some aviodable adverse influences.
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今日的题目是道新题，为“双边讨论”题型。具体如下：
Some people think that the climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create business more opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
话题：the influences of climate change on business
关键词：a negative effect on business & more opportunities for business
先搞定开头段：
There has been a heated controversy about how business reacts to the climate change. I am of the opinion that enterprises are motivated to move to a better direction.
注：在Discuss & Give题型中，不强制your opinion必须在开头段给出，一些考官的范文中只在结尾段中给出了个人观点。但是在我所阅读过的大量考官范文中，大多数范文在开头段中就给出了自己的观点，我个人也倾向于开门见山，我认为这有利于考官对Task Response给出准确分数。
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接下来是Main body 2&3的写作。这两段的任务相当明确，分别论证题目中some people和others两方的观点。注意，这两段的topic sentence中，只能出现题中给定的双方观点，切勿做个人的主观加工，相当于“命题写作”。现在，我们一起头脑风暴，先从some一方观点着手，他们认为环境变化给企业造成了负面影响，那么气候到底发生了哪些变化？又有哪些类型的企业容易受到环境影响呢？
- Global warming. 一些传统制造业会(manufacturing industries)减产甚至被关停。它们的生产依赖传统的矿物燃料(fossil fuels)，而这些能源的使用会导致大量的温室气体排放(greenhouse gas emissions)，是全球变暖的主要原因。
- Tourism也会受全球变暖影响。海平面(sea level)的上升致使一些国家著名的沿海景点遭受了破坏。这里可以举到大家耳熟能详的马尔代夫(Maldives)为例。
再来思考如何展开others的观点：
- Technological innovation. 企业为了combat climate change以及respond to government policies，需要采用新型能源，如low carbon fuels，这促进了企业的技术创新能力、研发能力。
- Environmental protection industry顺势崛起，为一些人提供就业岗位的同时，其环保产品和服务也成为了巨大的商机。
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全篇范文如下：
(Background Statement)There has been a heated controversy about how business reacts to the climate change. (Thesis Statement)I am of the opinion that enterprises are motivated to move to a better direction.
(Topic sentence)Some people argue that climate change can be catastrophic to business development. (Explanation1) From their perspectives, manufacturing industries will bear the brunt, as the majority of them rely heavily on fossil fuels, like petrol and coal. The consumption of these fuels are the chief culprit of global warming. With many governments collecting the carbon emission tax to reduce the greenhouse effects, these traditional industries are confronted with decreasing economic growth and increasing unemployment. (Explanation2) This is also suffered by tourism. The rise in sea level caused by growing temperature damages many coastal tourist attractions. A typical case in point is that Maldives is losing its territory.
(Topic sentence)However, there are others who believe that climate change is positive to business. (Explanation1)In their opinion, companies have to be devoted to technological innovation facing such challenge. Specifically, they are encouraged to develop and adopt new clean energy like low carbon fuels. This boosts their independent innovation and competitiveness. (Explanation2)Environmental protection industry can also take the advantage of the situation. As an emerging industry, it provides loads of job opportunities, and its products and services create enormous wealth for society, especially when more and more people are becoming eco-conscious.
In my opinion, misfortune makes fortune. Climate change, in spite of its disastrous effects, also creates more opportunities to new energy industries, the boom of which not only alleviates greenhouse effects, but also brings more work opportunities to society and raises the government revenue.
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