06 The large numbers are due to their assimilation of other ethnic groups, which contributes to their population growth.
人口数多的原因是....吸收其他民族....因而人口数增多
显然逻辑上重复了。后面这部分去掉也不影响整体意思
<code>The large numbers are due to their assimilation of other ethnic groups
/<code>
这里作者没有提 population，可能是前文已经有了，所以不再重复
- assimilation： 吸收，同化
- ethnic：种族的
07 It is essential to delegate powers of operation and management to enterprises and institutions so as to let them manage their own affairs in accordance with the principle of having full authority for management and administration
delegate 授权。授权是什么意思，就是让被授权的人或机构全权管理，原文提到了三次同样意思的管理，
其实可以改成：
<code>It is essential to deleget powers of operation, management and administration to enterprises and institutions so as to let them manage their own affairs.
/<code>
不过作者提到，由于是政府公文，所以在最后加上重复的 "full authority" 更正式一些。这也就是，重复并不一定是问题，也要看使用的场合，以及是否是必要的强调。
08 Our policy is unswerving and will not be shaken, and we shall always follow it
这里也是三处重复了：
- unswerving
- not be shaken
- always follow
建议改成：
<code>Our policy will not change, and we shall always follow it.
/<code>
依然有点重复，但重在重复。这在中文语境下也好理解的：我们的政策不会变，我们会坚定不移的...."
09 The Party member must put the interests of the revolution and the Party first, dealing with all his personal problems in accordance with the principle that the interests of the revolution and the Party are paramount, instead of placing his own interests above those of the revolution and the Party.
这段是真啰嗦。出现了三处”利益“相关，以下的改动里面提到了一个技巧：
- 当需要重复的时候，可以考虑用 it, them, thses 等指代
<code>The Party memeber must put the interests of the revolution and the Party first, dealing with all his personal problems in accordance with the principle that those interests are paramount.
/<code>
paramount: 至高无上的。如 The interests of the consumer should be paramount.
10 We should speed up housing construction in cities and towns, especially the building of medium and low-grade housing estates, so as to improve the housing conditions of the inhabitants there.
加速住房建设的本意也就是要改善居民的居住条件。
<code>We should speed up housing construction of urban housing, especially medium- and low-income units./<code>
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