原来精彩的句子是这样变来的

英语简单句承载的信息量小,易学易模仿,考生在写作时会首选简单句。但简单句的过多使用将直接影响作文的质量。考生可从形式和内容两个方面对简单句进行”美容”,形式是内容的载体,内容是形式的灵魂。考生在写作时应做到形式和内容的完美结合,使作文形神兼备,实现华丽蝶变。

原来精彩的句子是这样变来的

形式”活”起来

通过以下移位手段来改变句子成分在句中的位置呈现从而使句子变得活泼生动。这些手段的运用融汇了知识与能力,彰显了个人魅力与品位,放大了作文得分亮点。

1.插入

在句中插入某些成分,起补充、说明作用。最明显的特征是被插入成分前后都用逗号隔开。

【高考示例】 You and I are teenagers. It offers teenagers a chance. We can enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture.(2015北京卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 将简单句合并成一个句子。可将You and I作为插入成分置于第二句中的teenagers后。enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture改为不定式作定语,修饰a chance。

【华丽蝶变】 It offers teenagers, like you and me, a chance to enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture.

2.

嵌入

在某一分句中嵌入另一分句,构成句中句。最常见的情况是:定语从句嵌入宾语从句中、感叹句嵌入宾语从句中、名词性从句嵌入强调句型中。

【高考示例】 We are told something. We doubt whether it is true. We are in the habit of raising doubts. We can find the correct answer. We can learn more.(2015湖北卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 将简单句合并成一个句子。最后两个简单句存在并列关系,可用并列连词连接。第三个简单句和最后两个简单句存在条件关系,故用if连接起来。第一个和第二个简单句合并,用whether引导宾语从句,作as to的宾语。在宾语从句中再嵌入由what引导的主语从句。

【华丽蝶变】 If we are in the habit of raising doubts as to whether what we are told is true, we can find the correct answer and learn more.

3.分隔

先行词与定语从句或连接词与同位语从句被其他成分隔开,形成分隔修饰。分隔的目的是避免歧义或把握句子重心,避免头重脚轻。

【高考示例】 Our school will donate many kinds of books to the Chinese class. They include language learning, Chinese history and Chinese poetry.(2015天津卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 将简单句合并成一个句子。可将第二个简单句压缩为定语从句修饰先行词books。不过定语从句与先行词之间被to the Chinese class隔开,形成分隔修饰。

【华丽蝶变】 Our school will donate many kinds of books to the Chinese class which include language learning, Chinese history and Chinese poetry.

4.前置

将正常词序下通常较晚出现的成分移至句首,使之处于突出的位置从而受到特殊的强调,这种手段为前置。as/though 引导让步状语从句时,将从句谓语动词、状语、作表语的形容词或名词前置即可,注意名词前置时,省略冠词。

【高考示例】 I really want to obtain this precious opportunity. I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communication skills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public by offering my service.(2015陕西卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 第一句和第二句在逻辑上存在因果关系,故用because连接起来。为突出by offering my service可将其前置。同时也是为了避免过多介词短语置于句末。

【华丽蝶变】 I really want to obtain this precious opportunity because, by offering my service, I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communication skills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public.

5.后置

在遣词造句时将最重要的内容置于句尾,使之处于突出地位,这种手段为后置。故造句时应避免头重脚轻,注意句子结构的匀称。在名词性从句中,借助it作形式主语或形式宾语,将真正的主语或宾语后置;在同位语从句中,主语太长而谓语太短,将同位语从句后置;使用全部倒装,将主语后置。

【高考示例】 The test will enhance the examinee's consciousness of health. On the contrary it will also be more likely to result in over anxiety. People all said that.(2015广东卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 由People all said that可联想到it's said that...句型,将真正的主语后置,从而避免头重脚轻。同时,第二句和第一句为转折关系,可使用but连接。

【华丽蝶变】 It's said that the test will enhance the examinee's consciousness of health, but on the contrary it will also be more likely to result in over anxiety.

6.同位

对与之同位的名词或短语提供补充说明的成分称之为同位语,可以是一个词也可以是一个完整的句子。为表示同位概念,也可使用连接性状语namely/that's/in other words/such as等,还可使用破折号表示。

【高考示例】 DNA test is a new technique. It is done by analyzing the saliva sample. It appears in the foreign medical industry.(2015广东卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 可将a new technique改作同位语表示对DNA test的补充说明。同时,将第二个句子压缩为定语从句。

【华丽蝶变】 DNA test, a new technique, which is done by analyzing the saliva sample, appears in the foreign medical industry.

原来精彩的句子是这样变来的

内容”实”起来

依据信息的主次和逻辑关系,使用较复杂的句式结构将信息连接成句。这些手段的运用使得零散的信息得以归整,行文逻辑得以凸现,句式结构更复杂,语意表达更流畅。

1.使用定语从句

找准信息的最佳结合点,在某一关键信息词后接定语从句,以此将简单句压缩,实现巧妙”嫁接”。

【高考示例】 Amazingly, she earned respect from her students. They later grew to be confident, considerate and well-behaved.(2015广东卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 用定语从句将简单句合并成一个句子。将第二个句子压缩为定语从句,接在先行词her students后。

【华丽蝶变】 Amazingly, she earned respect from her students, all of whom later grew to be confident, considerate and well-behaved.

2.

使用状语从句

依据前后逻辑关系使用从属连词将简单句连接起来。注意要点间的关联,防止强拉硬扯。

【高考示例】 He felt happy. He praised me in public. He said that I was an intelligent student.(2015湖南卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 用状语从句将简单句合并成一个句子。用so...that将第一句和第二句连接起来。第三句可改为动词-ing形式作伴随状语。

【华丽蝶变】 He felt so happy that he praised me in public, saying that I was an intelligent student.

3.使用名词性从句

根据意义需要巧妙地将其中的一个简单句融为另一个简单句的句子成分,从而实现两个简单句的完美对接。

【高考示例】 I'm brought up in a culture emphasizing collectivism. I tend to sacrifice my own interest for the group's benefit. This is the main reason for my choice.(2015浙江卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 用名词性从句将简单句合并成一个句子。第一句和第二句存在因果关系,可将第一句变成非谓语动词作状语。再结合第三句考虑,可将前两句变为表语从句,用that连接。

【华丽蝶变】 The main reason for my choice is that being brought up in a culture emphasizing collectivism, I tend to sacrifice my own interest for the group's benefit.

4.使用并列句

当前后关系并列时,可使用并列连词将简单句直接合并。句与句通过连词的连接在结构上更紧凑,在内容上逻辑意义更清晰。

【高考示例】 The boy was poor. He couldn't afford even a candle. He bored a hole in the wall. He wanted to ”steal” light from his neighbor's house to read at night.(2015福建卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 该片段简单句数量多,前后逻辑不连贯,影响句意表达。可将was poor压缩为一个形容词作定语,也可变为动词-ing形式作定语。第二句和第三句在逻辑上存在因果关系,可用so连接。wanted to ”steal” light 是bored a hole的目的,可改作目的状语。

【华丽蝶变】 The boy, being poor, couldn't afford even a candle, so he bored a hole in the wall to ”steal” light from his neighbor's house to read at night.

5.使用特定句式

特定句式的使用让句式灵活,避免刻板单一,使行文活泼流畅、富于变化。考虑使用省略、替代、倒装、强调等变换句式,让行文有所起伏;在表达观点且不需要使用人作主语时,可考虑使用被动句型,将收到意想不到的效果;在表达情感时可尝试使用if虚拟条件句。

【高考示例】 If only I were three years younger than I am now. I would strongly recommend that I set more practical and specific goals.(2015重庆卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 用特定句式将简单句合并成一个句子。可使用if虚拟条件句将前后两个句子合并,同时还可以将if省略,构成倒装。

【华丽蝶变】 Were I three years younger than I am now, I would strongly recommend that I set more practical and specific goals.

6.使用非限定分句

使用非谓语动词,构成非限定分句,既能使用较复杂的语法为行文增色又能合并简单句,一举两得。使用非谓语动词作状语时,注意前后逻辑主语要保持一致。

【高考示例】 I thought that his solution might be wrong. I carefully analyzed the problem. I tried to work it out in a different way.(2015湖北卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 用非限定分句将简单句合并成一个句子。三个简单句的主语一致,且analyzed 和tried to work it out构成并列关系,可用并列连词and将后两个简单句合并。第一个简单句和后边两个简单句在逻辑上构成因果关系,故将第一个简单句改为非限定分句作原因状语。

【华丽蝶变】 Thinking that his solution might be wrong, I carefully analyzed the problem and tried to work it out in a different way.

7.使用无动词分句

在对庞杂的信息进行处理时可使用既不含限定动词又不含非限定动词的无动词分句,即主要由形容词、副词、名词、介词等构成。无动词分句可有效吸纳附加信息,避免信息遗漏,减少句数,增加信息容量。

【高考示例】 The roads and highways are under large-scale construction. There is still much room for improvement. The number of cars has been increasing these years.(2015江苏卷某考生作文)

【思路分析】 用无动词分句将简单句合并成一个句子。第一句和第二句存在让步关系,可用in spite of/despite体现。第二句和第三句存在因果关系,可使用because of体现。

【华丽蝶变】 In spite of the large-scale construction of roads and highways, there is still much room for improvement, because of the increasing number of cars these years.

原来精彩的句子是这样变来的


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