我们的修改案例频繁被一些中介盗用。为保护团队的知识产权，从本期开始，本系列只点评原文，修改后实例将只对经过留学身份审核的学弟学妹开放。
During my four-year undergraduate study, I have always put study as my priority.
◆ 第一句用词及句型都属于baby language；
◆ 为无效语句,这种junk statement在文书修改中属于必删内容。
Although I find it a little challenged to gain a full understanding of the courses at first since it was a completely new domain for me to learn. But I still hold the belief that as long as we want it enough, we can definitely work it out.
◆ 存在明显的语法错误及baby language；
◆ 属于典型的“只要我XX，就能XX”的flag，注意reviewer非常不喜欢这种立flag的语句，会认为你在浪费他们的阅读时间。如果在陈述的开始几句或几段都是这种内容，会造成他们极差的阅读体验。
I still remember vividly that the first time I came across the C language programming, I couldn’t figure out how the whole program was written out. Thus, I came to search every possible area which were related to this. I bought reference books like the fundamental programming skills and the grammarrules of C. I've devoted plenty of time to do the preview and review of the core courses.
◆ 作者希望证明自己解决问题的能力，但所举例子只展现自己的reading ability，此能力是属于谁都可以具有的，无法体现自己的特殊性；
◆ 没有说明自己如何解决具体的某一个问题，切忌笼统的“我学习了，我提高了，我很开心”这类的表述。
Within several class, I managed to develop a simple calculating system all by myself when the others were still trying to master the basic law of the C program.
◆ 没有说明如何开发，开发的成果如何利于自己或者团队，造成什么影响；
◆ 切忌与他人进行比较，reviewer非常反感的一点。
Besides, I’m kind of a perfectionist.
◆ 这种自立flag的语句应直接删除。
It was in the Internet technology and application class, our teacher made an assignment of making a piece of film about life experiences.
◆ 非常奇怪且不可取的句型，reviewer更喜欢straight forward的表达。
A bunch of my classmates choose to make a perfunctory effort because of the limited time. While I decided since we have to complete it, why not do our best? So I spend a whole day sitting in front of my laptop to make a delicate animation.
◆ 又是与他人比较凸显自己的能力；
◆ 反问式语句要不得；
◆ 最后一句仍然无法显示自己能力，这种hard-working是谁都可以具有的；
◆ 本文中没有一个实例可以证明自身独特能力。
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